Morgan
My only input after this much review is to tighten up the dialogue. The dialogue and visuals seem to be on two different time lines. For comix books, the dialogue has too many “ands”. I’d try talking through the dialogue instead of reading the dialogue. I think you will find “and” used a bit more than in natural dialogue.
Morgan
My only input after this much review is to tighten up the dialogue. The dialogue and visuals seem to be on two different time lines. For comix books, the dialogue has too many “ands”. I’d try talking through the dialogue instead of reading the dialogue. I think you will find “and” used a bit more than in natural dialogue.